Hullo, everyone! I’m here with another part of Twinepathy! Have you been enjoying it? I hope you have, ’cause things are about to get crazier… New? Start here.
Brooklyn stares at the fake volleyball like she’s expecting it to explode, and Madison backs away carefully. Nothing happens. I sigh. “Well, that’s disappointing.”
Brooklyn glares at me. “That’s fortunate! What if something had happened, and it blew up or sprayed acid or something?”
I tilt my head. “You need to read more books. Things don’t happen that way. If it was a bomb, it would have had a countdown clock on it, of course.”
She narrows her eyes. “You’re teasing me. Listen, Albany, this isn’t one of those dumb novels. There’s no guarantee that things will turn out right no matter what.”
You’re forgetting about little Maddie, I remind her telepathically. Lighten up a bit. Sure, I know how high the stakes could be, but to be honest, all we have is… well, a little girl with amnesia and a strange ball with a button on it. That doesn’t really seem all that dangerous to me.
Brooklyn sighs. “Would you like some more water, Madison?” she asks.
Madison nods. “Yes, please.” Why does she have to be so adorable? It makes me want to give her whatever she asks for.
Brooklyn goes to the kitchen, and I get Maddie to sit down on the couch next to me. “So you don’t remember this at all?” I ask, holding up the ball.
She shakes her head, then pauses. “Well…”
I lean forward. “What? Are you remembering something?”
Maddie frowns. “Not… not remembering exactly. But I keep getting the urge to do something, like…” Her frown deepens. “Something with my hands. It doesn’t have anything to do with that.” She motions toward the ball.
Now I’m frowning. “What do you mean?”
She shrugs helplessly. “I don’t know. I just… I just can’t remember what it is.” Her little fists clench. “And I don’t want to try it in case… something bad happens.”
I pat her shoulder awkwardly. “I know. We’ll figure it out, don’t worry.”
Brooklyn comes back into the room and hands Maddie a glass of water. “There you go.” She turns to me. “Albany, I—” Her eyes pop halfway out of her head as she stares over my shoulder.
I spin around instantly, expecting Mom and Dad, or Denver, or something else relatively… normal. Or even something absolutely terrible. But no. All I see is a cute guy I’ve never seen before, leaning against the doorframe, a mask covering most of his face. His fancy suit and cocky manner are almost jarring. He smirks at us and tosses a wink. “Hey, girls. What’s up?”
Whaaaat??? Who is this masked man? (*cough* Couldn’t resist…) What’s going to happen next? How did he even get there? Guess we’ll have to wait to find out…
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Well then.
Nothing’s blown up yet. A good sign.
And this masked guy doesn’t seem threatening yet. Also a good sign.
Maybe the button on the volleyball was the masked dude’s signal/summoner/thingy?
Also, because I’m 99% sure you haven’t watched The Princess Bride and you can’t have a masked man in black without having a Princess Bride reference:
Albany: Why the mask?
Masked Mystery Man: They’re terribly comfortable. In the future, I think everyone will be wearing them.
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😀 All very good signs. Very good guess, and it might even be right… in a simplified way. 😉
YES FOR THE PRINCESS BRIDE!!! *fist pump* XD The funniest thing is that that response is actually exactly like something our mystery guy would say. 😉
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Ooh! Masked guy randomly appears. =P Sounds like you’re setting up for something here. There’s a whole lot of mystery in this story. I need more though! XP I’m curious about that urge that Maddie has. So far the story seems to be on a roll, but it still feels a little laid back. Looking forward to see where you take it!
~Michael Hollingworth
Disce Ferenda Pati – Learn to endure what must be borne
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…I might be setting something up… XD
Maddie… 😀 😀 😀 That I am super excited about. I can’t wait for that part. The tension’s going to start growing gradually – where I’m at in writing it right now, it’s started to take a more serious turn. O.O
Thanks so much for your comment! 😀
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Oh? Man…. I canNOT wait to see more of this. I want so badly to know where it’s going. XP Moar tension! Bring it on! =P I can’t wait.
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😀 I’m so excited! Glad you are, too!!!
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🙂
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No explosion? *sigh* I guess it’s good that no one blew up. 😛
This is so exciting! I can’t wait to read this next part. 🙂
Oh! Is the guy Blaze?? Well, so far I’m liking the guy. 🙂
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That is most definitely a good thing. 😉
It might be Blaze… XD
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No explosion, that’s good. 🙂
Okay…I have a strong feeling I’m going to like this mystery guy…and I haven’t a clue why… 😛
I need the next part, like, ASAP!
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😀 It makes me so happy to hear you say that! He’s one of my favorite characters.
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“Why the mask? Were you burned by acid? Or something like that?”
“No, it’s just that they’re terribly comfortable. I think everyone will be wearing them in the future.”
Please. This needs to at least be nodded to in the dialog. XD
Oh, maybe Maddy is his loyal sidekick! *hugs Maddy* I love sidekicks. Cute little girls too, even if they’re not sidekicks. 😉
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XDDD Maybe I’ll hint at that some time in the future. Nothing like that in the draft yet, but he also wasn’t originally wearing a mask.
Maaaaybe… maybe not…
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You totally should! XD
No mask originally? Interesting how many elements just kinda pop up by themselves. I had one in Amazing Honesty. I just looked back and was like, “Hey, that was smart!”
Who knew a nickname would fill a plot hole? 😛
Oh ho then… *scribbles this down to remember for next week and gloat if it comes to something* 😀
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XD It doesn’t actually come to anything… I just thought it would make more sense for him to have a mask. 😉
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Well still… it’s a better visual. 😉
It makes more sense because of superhero masks in general? Or… is there something else? *dramatic music*
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Wow, that is quite a cliffhanger! At least there was no explosion. . .but now I really want to find out who this guy is! *sigh* I guess I’ll have to wait. 😉
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😀 It won’t be too long! I have a bonus post coming up soon…
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Ohmygosh this is getting goooood!!!!!! I know everyone’s commenting about the masked man (I wanna know who he is!), but I really want to know what Madison wants to do with her hands!
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😀 Thank you!!! I can’t wait for that part, I think you’ll love it. 😉
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Love the reversal of the bombs-have-clocks trope, but I have one question: how can we tell the guy’s cute if he’s got a mask covering most of his face?
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Thanks! Very true… I’ll probably take that out. See, I need you as one of my beta readers. XD
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Oh yes! That’s awesome. And mysterious. There’s a ton of questions going through my head right now- What’s that guy doing there? Who is he? What is it that thing Madison feeling? It’s so exciting! Can’t wait to read more!
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you’re enjoying it! 😀
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And the plot thickens…
I see the Princess Bride quips have already been taken. XD I can’t wait to find out what’s up with this mysterious fellow!!
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XD He’s awesome! I’ll be posting a bonus post later this afternoon, so you may want to check that out… *wiggles eyebrows*
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Somebody PLEASE give this person The Best Cliff-Hangers Ever award!
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XD Are you giving it to me? Because I will accept! XDDD
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Okay, first: I’m really enjoying this! Keep up the great work! 😉
BUT– I just gotta say that little question at the end… “Who is this masked man?” instantly got my brain on a whole other train of thought. I kept thinking it was a quote from a movie, but I wracked my brain for what seemed like forever and still could not figure out what it was!! Well, I finally remembered… We have a video series from a Creationist & somewhere in that series, he tells this joke about a guy leaving home jogging, making three left turns and then jogging back home. It ends like this: As he was jogging back home, he saw two masked men waiting for him. Who were the masked men?
Anyway, you nearly drove me crazy!!! Lol! ;P
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Thank you so much!!! 😀
XD I’m pretty sure that the quote is from the Lone Ranger… but it might be something else. In my head, it’s from Adventures in Odyssey, The Green Ring Conspiracy. 😉 I’ve heard that one before!!!! I’ve used on people, and it confuses them so much. 😛
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You’re very welcome. 🙂
Haha! Well, since I’ve watched the Lone Ranger… and I grew up on Adventures in Odyssey… I likely could have heard that from one or both of those. 😉
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